The Tower Of Death - Revision history

Mark D. Stroyer: Headings. I'm too busy to correct the grammar now.

2007-05-23T18:37:38Z

Headings. I'm too busy to correct the grammar now.

Elegost: edited to be more wikified. and spelling check.

2007-05-22T14:02:33Z

edited to be more wikified. and spelling check.

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Michael edwards at 01:29, 16 May 2007

2007-05-16T01:29:23Z

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Black Joe: Spelling and spacing errors corrected. More to do later.

2007-04-30T02:52:49Z

Spelling and spacing errors corrected. More to do later.

Mark D. Stroyer at 19:04, 28 April 2007

2007-04-28T19:04:17Z

Mark D. Stroyer at 18:47, 28 April 2007

2007-04-28T18:47:55Z

Mark D. Stroyer: /* Part 2= */

2007-04-28T18:46:39Z

Part 2=

Mark D. Stroyer: There. That should make it look a little better.

2007-04-28T18:46:01Z

There. That should make it look a little better.

Mark D. Stroyer: MAJOR grammar correction.

2007-04-28T03:01:12Z

MAJOR grammar correction.

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Mark D. Stroyer: Readibility. I'll now attempt to go back through and correct grammar. Oh, boy.

2007-04-28T02:28:11Z

Readibility. I'll now attempt to go back through and correct grammar. Oh, boy.

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 ==Part 2==
-:THE YORKMAN
+===THE YORKMAN===
 :Issue 16
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 Sam just chuckled.
-==Derby==
+===Derby===
 Rob stood outside enjoying his new pipe he bought. Derbymen ran from area to area asseasing damages and helping wounded. He yawned from sleep depravation. James emerged from a nearby hut and walked over to Rob.
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 Rob headed to the shore and James followed.
+===Native Village===
 "I swear I wasn't goin touch her!!" shouted Captian Edwards from his bamboo cage.
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 As the roaming shaman chanted louder and louder a bright light engulfed his body. Edwards stared in wonderment of the ritual.
 Nighter looked up at the Island treetops. His clothes were muddy and blood soaked. He tried to move many times now, but he was just too tired. He closed his eyes and heard a soft clicking noise.
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-==Derby==
+===Derby===
 "What is it Rob?"
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 Rob nodded his head.
 Edwards awoke to nothing. No cage. No natives. No freaky glowing shaman. Just nothing.
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-:Derby Evening Press Issue 7
+===Derby Evening Press Issue 7===
 :NATIVE INVASION
 :HALTED IN TRACKS!!!!
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 :"FIRE!!!"
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+===Near Tower of Death===
 Miles away Edwards was coming up on the southern shore. A few more feet and  he would see the ocean. Instead he saw a huge Black-as-night spine jutting out of the sea.
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 "Really I couldn't tell!" mumbled Rob as he grabbed some FAKS and went into the bush to see the damage he didn't mean to cause.
 "All i'm seeing is a dead tiger." Mumbled Kjendlie.

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 "What do you know about Bauer?"
 "Kjendlie, seriously you need to relax with this whole CTU organization."
-" Nighter, how could you even say that? He is trying to dislove the CP and make all our hard work null and void. He is trying to destory us and everything we stand for!"
 The pair sat in Czechy's infamous backroom. Smoke and alcohol clouded the air in the cramped inner chamber. A single oil lamp lit the room as Nighter stared across the table to his friend.
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 "Bauer just wants to help. I've talked to the guy, KJ. He's on the level."
-−
 Kjendlie just stood up and left. Nighter finished his ale alone.
-−
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 ===Meanwhile, at the base of MT. Shartak...===
-−
-Capt. Michael Edwards awoke to the glint of a machete, about to cut his head off. He barely rolled out of the way as the weapon dropped. He wobbled to his feet and wobbled some more as he got his bearings. He saw a beatuful native woman standing across from him.
+Capt. Michael Edwards awoke to the glint of a machete, about to cut his head off. He barely rolled out of the way as the weapon dropped. He wobbled to his feet and wobbled some more as he got his bearings. He saw a beautiful native woman standing across from him.
-−
 "I must confess, if I was to die I'd love it to be by those beautiful bosoms."
 "Opttk Dack Hjkt Ajth Iut Attck Plut!" Shouted the woman.
-−
 "Whoa now, I said IF!!!"
 The woman charged at Edwards. He was ready, however, and ran to her left and took out an empty bottle, smashing it over her head and knocking her out cold.
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 It had been a month, a month from when Patch disappared and Edwards went out looking for him, leaving Rozen to hold down the wreck.
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 Edwards drank some more Rum.
-−
+===Derby===
 Tribune Barnes' office was backlogged with hundreds of files. He always tried to keep it neat, but with such a forward moving city like Derby, it's hard to keep up. He heard a knock on the door and Rob Zombie entered the office.
-−
 "Hey, Rob."
-−
 Rob sat in the guest chair and lit a pipe. "Hey James, just came by to finish up any needed work for the new court system. Oh! That and we finally killed that Wiksik raiding party that's been harassing traders."
-−
 "Good, Rob. Yeah, the courts system is just about finished. All we need is..." CRAAAAAAAAAAACK RUUUUUUUUUUUUMBLE!!!!!!!
-−
 The whole office was knocked down as a huge earthquake rocked Derby.
-−
-Everyone okay? Rob, you still alive?"
+"Everyone okay? Rob, you still alive?"
 "DAMN!!! My pipe's broke!!!" yelled Rob as he stood up from the rubble. Standing up, he looked out onto the sea and saw what looked like a huge black rift in the horizon.
 "What the hell is up with that?" mumbled Rob.
-"James was facing opposite of Rob and surveryed the town for anyone needing medical treatment. He looked North and the color drained from his face.
+"ames was facing opposite of Rob and surveyed the town for anyone needing medical treatment. He looked north, and the color drained from his face.
-−
 "Rob, look up north!!"
-−
 "Hey James, what do you make of this? ...James?" Rob turned around and saw James running to the hospital to get more supplies. "James, where you going?"
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 Wiksik warriors came charging towards Derby, swinging machetes and wailing shrill warcries.
-Rob placed the broken pipe into his mouth and tried to light it, forgeting it was broken. He let it drop and simply remarked,
+Rob placed the broken pipe into his mouth and tried to light it, forgetting it was broken. He let it drop and simply remarked, "Isn't this just the best damn day to be alive..."
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 ===MEANWHILE -DORK...YORK-===
-−
 If he had cared. Kjendlie would have noticed a small tremor underneath his feet as he walked to the 1st Colonial Militia's headquaters. He did, however, step over some shit near the doorway successfully.

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 "Well, then," grumbled Edwards, "guess someone's picking a fight with a naked pirate. Perv."
-MEANWHILE, IN DERBY:
+===MEANWHILE, IN DERBY:===
 "Steady, men..."

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	If you have been offended by use of your character in ''The Tower Of Death'' then grow up. It's a work of fiction inspired by true life events (well, true Shartak events).		If you have been offended by use of your character in ''The Tower Of Death'' then grow up. It's a work of fiction inspired by true life events (well, true Shartak events).
	''The Tower Of Death'' first came on sale during the flocking of visitors to Midway Island, also called Ry'leh.		''The Tower Of Death'' first came on sale during the flocking of visitors to Midway Island, also called Ry'leh.
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−	==Part 2===	+	==Part 2==

	(Unwritten. Will be added.)		(Unwritten. Will be added.)

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 ''Captain Edwards and The Tower Of Death'' is a popular Shartak published novel, given in instalments. The currently published parts of volume I are displayed below. There has been a slight delay in printing, because trained monkeys (suspect: Zeff) have run off with the printing press. Every effort is being made by the Privateers and JRG to recover it.
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-Part 1 of Capt. Edwards and the Tower of DEATH!!!!
+==Part 1 of Capt. Edwards and the Tower of DEATH!!!!==
 "What do you know about Bauer?"
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-Meanwhile, at the base of MT. Shartak...
+===Meanwhile, at the base of MT. Shartak...===
 Capt. Michael Edwards awoke to the glint of a machete, about to cut his head off. He barely rolled out of the way as the weapon dropped. He wobbled to his feet and wobbled some more as he got his bearings. He saw a beatuful native woman standing across from him.
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 "Isn't this just the best damn day to be alive..."
-MEANWHILE -DORK...YORK-
+===MEANWHILE -DORK...YORK-===
 If he had cared. Kjendlie would have noticed a small tremor underneath his feet as he walked to the 1st Colonial Militia's headquaters. He did, however, step over some shit near the doorway successfully.
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-MEANWHILE  MT.SHARTAK
+===MEANWHILE  MT.SHARTAK===
 Edwards was naked. He was naked underneath the summit's waterfall. He had trekked all the way up the mountain and saw no sign of Patch. Or of anyone, really. Upon arriving at the falls and realizing he hadn't bathed in months, Edwards decided to enjoy a swim.
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 The message spread like wildfire in Derby.
+===MEANWHILE MT. SHARTAK===
 Edwards charged at the dark figure in all his naked glory. The figure too charged at Edwards, albeit slower. The two came face-to-face and locked blades. Edwards could see that it was a native. An old man.
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-MEANWHILE OUSTIDE YORK IN THE JUNGLE.
+===MEANWHILE OUSTIDE YORK IN THE JUNGLE.===
 The night air was humid as Nighter and Sam walked side by side.
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 Kjendlie swung the rifle around to Bauer and pulled the trigger...
-<big>BANG</big>
+<big>BANG</big> (Note: Extra-big)
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--MT. SHARTAK-
+===MT. SHARTAK===
 Edwards dressed himself as the old man tried to free himself from his vine rope bindings.
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 Edwards just shook his head at the old man’s ramblings and began his descent back to the jungle and his search for Patch...
--DERBY-
+===-DERBY-===
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 “We caught a native still alive.”
-THE JUNGLES BELOW MT. SHARTAK.
+===THE JUNGLES BELOW MT. SHARTAK.===
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 The natives simply grunted...
-YORK
+===YORK===
 Nighter ran for his life. He moved slower, however, due to the horrific pain in his leg. Kjendlie had landed a shot into his thigh.
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 Sam grunted as he grabbed Bauer’s body and threw it into Kjendlie’s freshly dug grave.
--Derby-
+===-Derby-===
 Rob and James stood in a small hut. A native was tied up sitting on the floor. Elegost stood in the doorway.
 “We caught him while the natives were running away. He got shot in the leg and we picked him up easy. Be careful, he is WickSick.”
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 “HEATKA TOAJ TKKKA THAKK!!! HEATKA TOAJ TKKKA THAKK!!! HEATKA TOAJ TKKKA THAKK!!!” the native shouted.
 “Heads for the tower, heads for the tower... That’s all he is saying, Rob,” responded James.
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 If you have been offended by use of your character in ''The Tower Of Death'' then grow up. It's a work of fiction inspired by true life events (well, true Shartak events).
 ''The Tower Of Death'' first came on sale during the flocking of visitors to Midway Island, also called Ry'leh.